Just for fun I will show you what I just submitted. I would be interested in your feedback. Here you go.
Written by Eric Vogel
801 319=4570 (cell)
243 W. 1455 S.
Orem, Utah 84058
Submitted on August 14th, 2015
Word count 1312 including cover page
I envision that each numbered line would include an illustration of some sort.
Probably a total page count of 24 pages.
1. Once upon a time there was a stone. It was sitting on the side of mountain. It was big and beautiful. It was the product of eons of heat and pressure. When the sun shone just right it would glisten.
2. One day a man came up the mountain. He was a master stone worker. He wandered around a bit and then came to stand in front of the stone. He walked around looking at the stone from every angle. He even made some notes. The stone was happy to be admired and became more convinced than ever about it’s beauty.
3. Several days later, the master stoneworker returned with others and a large cart. They began to tie ropes around the stone and levers underneath. The stone thought, “There is no way that they can move me, I’m too big” but, to it’s surprise, it soon began to feel itself moving.
4. At this point the stone said, “Hey, what are you doing? I’m happy here. Leave me alone!” The men untied the ropes and withdrew a pace. The master stoneworker approached the stone and talked to it in a quiet voice. He said, “I know you are happy on the mountain, who wouldn’t be. It’s beautiful here. But you were meant for greater things. Come with me and I will help you see a bigger world.”
5. After thinking about it the stone finally consented and it wasn’t long before the stone found itself loaded on the cart and being hauled away from the mountain home.
6. It was taken to a large warehouse where it was moved from the cart and left by itself.
7. The next day the master sontworker returned, this time carrying hammers and chisels. The master walked around the stone looking at it this way and that. After a time he picked up the hammer and a chisel and began to strike the stone.
8. At first it tickled but then it began to hurt and the stone watched while one piece of the stone fell to the ground, and then another and another. Sometimes the master would refer to a paper that he had on table. Sometimes small pieces fell away, sometimes large but always the pounding continued.
9. “Why would this man want to beat on me so? I was beautiful just the way I was” thought the stone. “Hey, cut it out! Quit pounding on me!” said the stone. So, the master stopped. He tried to persuade the stone that what he was doing would be for the best, even though it hurt, but the stone refused. The master hung his head, packed up his tools and left the stone alone.
10. Not long after, the stone saw a light where the door had opened again. The stone thought the master stoneworker was returning to try to persuade it again but it wasn’t. Instead, it was a tall, handsome man, dressed in fine clothes but he had shifty eyes. He seemed sneaky. He came to the stone and said, “I heard you were here. I hear that they have been pounding on you and telling you crazy stories.”
11. The stone wondered who the man was and how he knew so much. Then the man said, “I can make you beautiful and you don’t have to suffer. It will be so easy.” The man held up a bottle and said, “This is my magic bottle. I simply pour it on you and all the work is done without any pain to you.” The stone hesitated but then agreed to let the sneaky man do what he wanted.
12. The sneaky man then began to tell of all the wonders he could offer. He talked and he talked. As the man talked he opened the bottle and poured it over the stone promising that this was the easier way. It turned out that the bottle was full of acid. The man talked and talked and as he talked the acid began making the stone melt away. What had been a beautiful stone was dissolving into a dirty mud puddle on the floor. Still the man continued to talk and talk. Suddenly it occurred to the stone that if he didn’t do something the man would keep pouring acid and soon the stone would melt completely. The stone realized. “I’m not being changed for the better. I am being being destroyed!”
13. The stone told the man that he must leave. The man smiled and said, “But I have so much more to tell you.” The stone simply told him, “I have had enough. Please leave and take your bottle of acid with you.” The man wasn’t happy as he turned and left the room.
14. A few days later the master returned. He looked sadly at the stone. Much of his work had been lost, dissolved away. The stone no longer looked beautiful, just worn and common.
15. The master left and later returned with a young man at his side. He looked at the stone with a new look of hope. “This is my son. He has a gift. If you will let him, he can make you whole again. We can start over.” The stone wondered how it could be possible but agreed to let them try.
16. The master’s son looked at the stone with a look of love, mingled with sadness. He walked slowly around and around, looking at the damage. The stone was amazed at what happened next. The son would stoop down and pick up the mud that had been stone and gently pat it onto the stone again. Somehow the mud stuck and hardened into stone again. The stone couldn’t help but notice that the acid was burning the son’s hands but the son didn’t complain, he just kept working even though it must have hurt him dearly.
17. The next day the master stone worker returned and began again the shaping process. It still hurt but the stone tried to be brave.
18. Days passed, the son came often to watch the work progress. Something wonderful was emerging.
19. Finally the work was done. The master stepped back and gazing at the stone and said, “Because you allowed me and my son to work, you have become our masterpiece.”
20. The master stone worker, from the start, could see the potential in the stone that wouldn’t have been apparent to others. He knew that there was amazing beauty in the stone just waiting to be discovered.
21. And thus a beautiful stone had become more beautiful than ever. The stone, who had become an amazing piece of art, would be admired by all who saw it for generations to come.
22. The master stone worker and his son were thrilled with what the stone had become and the stone lived happily every after.
23. The End
Front Cover: This is a parable. It is the story of a beautiful stone. The stone sits on the side of a mountain enjoying life. One day a master stone worker comes along and the stone’s life begins to change.
Back Cover: Eric Vogel lives in Orem Utah. He and his wife are the parents of eight children. Eric has always been fond of telling stories, especially to his children. In 2011 Eric was diagnosed with bone cancer in his jaw. The last four years have indeed been a journey of change. There has been much pain in the journey but there has also been joy and, like the stone, it has certainly shaped him in ways he never expected. And like the story, Eric has found that it is best to trust the master even when it hurts and he has felt the touch of the Son helping to heal him when all seemed lost.